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She used to leave small gifts
all through my life - more
than once a cd by a band
I didn't know turned up
in my car, set to the perfect
track, or I might find a book,
a novel next to the bed,  poetry
dog-eared on the back of the
john, once a thoughtful photo
saved on the desktop where
I couldn't miss it.  I pictured
her placing each one, smiling
to herself the way she did
when I wasn't looking, slyly,
her eyes far away, as if she alone
knew the punchline.  I never
said a word of acknowledgment,
except in time to begin adding
my own secret offerings.  In this
way we grew alike, speaking
wordlessly by these bare synapses,
and while they held, the dark
was a little less,
the space closer.
©2008-2009 ~averyharker
:iconaveryharker:

Author's Comments

[edit: chopped a phrase near the end, a change I actually made along time ago but forgot to reflect it here]

Slightly sappy, to make you sniffle if you are wont to do.

The diction in the beginning feels a bit more worldly and immediate than my usual style, so I'm having trouble deciding if it sounds corny or not. I'm also iffy on the word "acknowledgment." It's such an awful lot of syllables all at once, but nothing else means the right thing, so I'm afraid I'm likely stuck with it.

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:iconcrownbladeraven:
I can somewhat identify with this... Brings back some awfully good memories.

Well done.

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You make the sound of pulling heaven down...
:icontangled-up-in-blue:
Awww. Tell her to bring me gifts. I'll pay her.
:iconaveryharker:
I think paying makes things be less like gifts and more like... I dunno... goods
:icontangled-up-in-blue:
YOU SHUT YOUR LYING MOUTH.
:iconaveryharker:
Shh. Not so loud. There's a very small chance someone might be trying to read in here.

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